Kakashi's Failures

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Kakashi's Failures

Unread postby Flux_Blade » February 16th, 2010, 2:51 am

Well, it looks like I finally got the Naruto one-shot done idea I had, started this a bit after the Pain arc ended. And it is in the 20 truths format.
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Everyone knows about Kakashi's one big failure, the one that granted him a new eye and changed his outlook forever, but people don't remember the others.

1 After being promoted to chunnin, Hatake Kakashi never saw his former genin teammates, as he tried to cut off his emotions due to his father’s failure and later suicide. He had believed they would never waste such a good tool as himself with such weak ones. A year later, he finds out that they died during a scouting mission that went bad. He refused to show up to the funeral, as his team leader thought he was being his typical self, in reality, it was because he would show the truth, that he couldn’t kill his emotions.

2. His greatest loss came from when the Kyuubi attacked, he lost his sensei and his last teammate, Rin. He failed Obito once again. Because of this, he was late an average of another hour on top of what he was already. While he knew there was nothing he could have done for his sensei, he still wondered if he could have been the one to stop the Kyuubi if he knew more.

3. While the sandaime had no replacements during the kyuubi attack, he had hoped that if Kakashi continued his improvement, that he could perhaps retire six years later. However, the copy-nin may have become famous, his improvement was nearly non-existent.

4. Due to the his losses and how affected he was, his skill level should have dropped, however, one green jumpsuit wearing nutcase couldn’t let his former friend’s teammate fall any farther, thus the occasional challenge. He also did it to remind him that there was something to fight for, even if it was to silence his self-proclaimed rival.

6. He picks up reading the Icha Icha series when Jiraiya attempts to draw him out of his shell. He gets hooked, but not in the way that Jiraiya would have liked. The stories are the closest he’ll ever get to a romantic relationship. He’s too afraid that whoever gets close to him will die.

7. Kakashi knows that Naruto is his sensei’s son and he played silent protector for him while he was at the orphanage. However, he never could approach the child because he looked way too much like Minato. And unlike the villagers who felt that perhaps that fox was attempting to make the child look like their hero, he knew the truth.

8. He also fails his sensei again, in not making sure the villagers see the boy as a hero. While he wouldn’t trade the boy away, just sometimes he wished he had more influence in the village and then he remembers that not even the Hokage could do that. But it still hurt to see those eyes, and he could not do anything, since there was no law about how they looked at the boy.

8. He also fails at helping the boy at all while he is at the academy. Sure it was not something Iruka realized, that the boy had too much chakra for the usual control. While he did have the fact him helping the boy would be ridiculously suspicious, he knew he had no right to use that as an excuse. Jiraiya, who supposedly never stepped foot into the village except to report in, was still able to make sure Naruto had enough money and received birthday gifts without letting anyone know who got it for him.

9. Kakashi picks the bell test because Minato used it, and with each group, he gives the same spiel about abandoning your friends. Each group except for the last team seven still fail the test. Only two groups continue on as ninjas, and the first one still to this day believe that Kakashi was wrong about failing them. They still remind him that they are ninjas when they pass until he takes the team seven, as they finally convince themselves he is just crazy.

10. The other team passed after taking the remedial classes and five years later, while Naruto has been gone for six months with Jiraiya, approached him wearing ANBU masks and thank him for teaching the lesson they needed. It is one of the two failures that he was proud of.

11. Upon looking over Iruka’s explanation of the skills of the group, Kakashi had been seriously considering failing the team right then and there. It had to have been divine retribution for not protecting Rin. The worst part was seeing a young Minato smiling with Obito’s smile. He didn’t fail the group because of Naruto, not Sasuke as some in the village thought. He knew the village didn’t need another one of him.

12. While he drilled the concept of teamwork into the group, he failed at pushing them harder. He had used his typical method of standing back and helping them when they asked. He had failed to realize that Naruto and Sakura hadn’t been use to have information they would have to search for, as Sakura learned how to deal with genjustu, but did not push herself. Naruto was so-so, as he had been alone for a quite a bit, and his learning by doing helped during team exercises. Sasuke thrived.

12. He knew for a while about the shadow clone justu trick and thought about teaching to Naruto, but seeing how Naruto could run himself into the ground with training, didn’t want to have his sensei’s child end up brain dead. He also thought Naruto did know as he seemed to react to the information the clones gave him. The reason he waited until Naruto came back was because he believed Jiraiya would explain it to him.

13. He hadn’t realized that Naruto was having problems with chakra during his fight with Kiba, though who could blame him, Naruto really only used kage bushin, and as typical for his favorite student, he only showed the problem during chakra exercises.

14. Yes, Naruto was his favorite student, sure he passed down Chidori to Sasuke and he took him away for a month for training. However, he had planned to train all three students no matter if they made it through the exams. That was before Orochimaru showed a marked interest in Sasuke and Gaara showed his murderous tendencies. He knew Jiraiya was in the village and had asked to train Naruto. He had refused at first, as he finally had the team working together with a bit less friction. He believed that Jiraiya would find out within a day or two and give Naruto the training he needed. Thus he found someone to help Naruto with his basics for perhaps a day, and Ebisu did know how to teach the basics. He never expected to find out if Ebisu had picked somewhere else to train, Naruto might not have gotten Jiraiya to train him. He hadn’t found Sakura and believed that she wanted the time to regain her friendship with Ino.

16. Kakashi failed at keeping his team together, and unlike his team, his ghost broke it willing. He had thought his conversation would have done more. He failed Naruto, there had to have been something he could have taught Naruto to give him an edge he needed to stop Sasuke.

17. The worst part to him was that people were telling him that he had finally failed right, no one expected the team to work as well as it did. While the team did not work together as well as Team Ten, he did not have the team having been molded from early childhood to work together, or have techniques that become more effective if with the other parts.

18. He failed his team by not being strong enough to not be in the hospital when they tried to get Sasuke back. Not to knock Tenzo, but he was the better ninja, he could have done something to stop Sasuke from leaving.

19. He failed in leading his team to Sasuke, as even though the Uchiha with the orange mask kept them away, he should have found a way to get Naruto through. He and Tenzo should have been enough to slow the man down, even if he was as good as Minato at Time-Space Justu.

20. His second failure that he is proud of is failing to stay dead. He helped his father pass on and he still had a chance to help his students. He believed that he wouldn’t fail this time.
The ones about his first team, ANBU time, the teams and Kakashi's beliefs he didn't pass are my invention, but the rest came from somewhere in the manga or information about the remaining teams in the chunin exams that was printed somewhere.

So let me know how it is, does it need polish, one of the truths could be worked better? And thanks for reading.
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Re: Kakashi's Failures

Unread postby Aldraia Dragonsong » February 19th, 2010, 12:09 pm

Ano, this might be an odd question, but what is the "Twenty Truths format"?
And why are there two entries for 8 and 12?
In 17, "finally failed right" is confusing -what is that intended to mean? That he failed but did better than expected?
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Re: Kakashi's Failures

Unread postby Flux_Blade » February 20th, 2010, 3:36 am

Ano, this might be an odd question, but what is the "Twenty Truths format"?
And why are there two entries for 8 and 12?
In 17, "finally failed right" is confusing -what is that intended to mean? That he failed but did better than expected?
I believe that the twenty truths format is writing about something, usually someone with 20 statements.

And to the second question, I did not realize, thanks for the catch. And since I wasn't completely happy with two of them.

The finally failed right was the fact he failed a team, but it was the correct decision. Perhaps I need to make that more clear.

Thanks for the critiques.
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Re: Kakashi's Failures

Unread postby Dechstreme » April 12th, 2010, 10:18 pm

This is some very interesting stuff.
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