Fragments

[Dechstreme]

Yeah, Kishimoto is not one to look for romance, especially when you take int account his comments about being bullied by girls in schools and how he hates them

Wait, WHAT? Is this for real?

[Darkandus]

Well that explains why Sakura used to hit Naruto.

[Kirai]

I'll just leave this here... does anybody else find the review amusing?

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I treid to read this story but can't because in honesty, this story it not about Naruto and gang...just character named and look like them...

You are writing about the story and completely dismissed the characters. They are just shells of who they are...nothing more, nothing less as they are completely out of characters.

You call them Naruto and gang by their name as much as your want but that not who they are isn't it?

Shouldn't you be writing about the characters themselves but you seemed so intent to write about the situation without thinking about the characters themselves...Good writers think of the story at all angles including the characters behaviour. Meaning, you write well but failed the story when you failed the character you supposed to write about.

A good fanfiction story is you are able to write about the characters without changing them to fit into the story. Which you completely and utteredly destroyed of who they are...

That's why people read fanfiction to see how the canon character as they are cope/adapt with the situation without losing who they are...That what makes them,them.

So, you write well granted, but thefailure of the character involves is lot to be desired.

Later.

[Tempest Kitsune]

I think you posted this before. If not, all I can say is... "TROLL-HOOOOOOOOOO!"

[Kirai]

Nope, same guy, similiar review. Still no clue.

[Tempest Kitsune]

Definitely a troll then. If he hates the fic so much, why not stop reading it?

[Zankaru Zelladonii]

I'll just leave this here... does anybody else find the review amusing?

Spoiler: show

I treid to read this story but can't because in honesty, this story it not about Naruto and gang...just character named and look like them...

You are writing about the story and completely dismissed the characters. They are just shells of who they are...nothing more, nothing less as they are completely out of characters.

You call them Naruto and gang by their name as much as your want but that not who they are isn't it?

Shouldn't you be writing about the characters themselves but you seemed so intent to write about the situation without thinking about the characters themselves...Good writers think of the story at all angles including the characters behaviour. Meaning, you write well but failed the story when you failed the character you supposed to write about.

A good fanfiction story is you are able to write about the characters without changing them to fit into the story. Which you completely and utteredly destroyed of who they are...

That's why people read fanfiction to see how the canon character as they are cope/adapt with the situation without losing who they are...That what makes them,them.

So, you write well granted, but thefailure of the character involves is lot to be desired.

Later.

I am glad yall mentioned trolls because I read that review thinking it was a real review and the idea of it being fake did not even pass my mind, first time I have had to force my mouth shut to stop a jaw-drop before.

[Tempest Kitsune]

No, it's a real review. The guy is trying to start something is all.

[Zankaru Zelladonii]

No, it's a real review. The guy is trying to start something is all.

Yeah, thats what I meant, that he was just trying to get under kirai's skin instead of it being an actual opinion on the story.

[Kirai]

heh I got a review like that, but that guy actually had a point.

This guy? Pff all he does is amuse me. His ideas what fanfiction is about... well they are interesting to say it politely^^

[Dechstreme]

Is it anything that you might share with us so we may be inspired to plot plotty plots to rehabilitate him or remove him from society, and optionally the gene poo?

[Kirai]

Eh , he complained mostly about expectations and there that Neji and Naruto were a bit weaker than they were in canon. Fair point really.

Also that Sakura might be a tad... too powerful. And yeah I have to be careful there, she did come out ahead a bit much. Wining against Neji, Shika and generally getting her way a bit often.

Not changing the first point. But I'm having an eye on the second.

[Dechstreme]

Maybe in a sense, the character has turned loose and out of control, forcing you to catch up to what she wants rather than what you want. This is something of a wave that can happen to stories overall. the authors have to either ride the wave and see were it takes them, or decimate it and try to make it go the way you want it to.

Has mixed results, it does.