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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Phht » July 3rd, 2009, 12:43 am

I think we'll get to see a combination of Sakura's intellect, all that remedial training making her a lean, mean, killing machine, and top notch use of the environment. I mean, would Suna nin know about the Kyuubi Trail beyond at most, "hey, that's where the bugger went through. It's all dead and everyone avoids the place if possible." After all, they weren't planning on going all over Fire Country instead of straight to Konoha. I expect to see the effects of residual biju energy on Suna nin at some point due to Sakura's trickery.

Remember that, yes, she is a genin, but she's proved she's more like a chunin in ability and the Suna nin likely will underestimate her still because of her official rank. For how long, I dunno. But it'll be long enough to put a dent in the pursuing force. After all, they appear to just be chasing after the pair rather than keeping an eye out for traps. So if Sakura's crafty enough, she could take out a few that way. Then she could use a Bunshin or two far enough away that the nin might not spot the fakeness, and have the Bunshins lead some Suna nin into the Trail with the hope they'll end up accidentally hitting one or more of the energy pockets and dying horrifically. With a bit of luck and skill, I wouldn't be surprised if she took done 5-10 of them because they were overconfident, in a rush, or otherwise not being smart.

Though, honestly, I really would not want Naruto anywhere near the Trail while unconscious, especially if he had unconsciously been channeling some of Kyuubi's chakra through his system at the time he passed out.

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Oh oh! Whatcha bet that, due to their efforts in stalling and bleeding out the Suna force... Sasuke gets promoted (by the Council if Sandaime dies)? And, due to what he went through on the mission, he turns it down because Naruto and Sakura didn't receive promotions as well, despite likely deserving it more for their efforts during the mission?

Then again, most of the elements that might push for that were rooted out earlier, so that's probably a long shot (and the author is smart enough not to pull such a stupid cheap trick).

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As to the Ino/Gaara thing, well, the synced readings is kinda creepy (and I suddenly got wondering what would happen if their sync rate hit 400% or higher :? ), but hopefully will have a no doubt awesome appearance crushing the invasion (because Ino wouldn't lose that argument, even if it was against a half-crazed jinchuuriki with a demon trying to drown her out through lots of shouting). I'd feel bad for Inoichi if Gaara ends up moving in with Ino ("Yes, Ino-san. Of course, Ino-san. Just please don't redecorate my mind again, Ino-san." :halo ).

Only downside is that Sasuke looks to be becoming a more humble team player due to events! Oh, and if the Sandaime dies in the Invasion, who gives Team Badass orders since they report directly to him?
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby serbii » July 3rd, 2009, 12:49 am

*Image of Ino and Gaara riding Shukaku around like an eva*
Do want O_o

Oh yeah, Sakura can do some damage. But it'd be unrealistic for her to win IMHO.
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Nebula1701 » July 3rd, 2009, 12:54 am

I say she gets about 50% of her targets then gets overwhelmed... but before she bites it, Jiraiya shows up.
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby serbii » July 3rd, 2009, 1:02 am

Jiraiya's already there, he just needs the right moment to make an epic entrance.
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Jasruv » July 3rd, 2009, 7:28 am

I predict that Sakura is going to kill some of their pursuers and buy enough time for Naruto to start to regain conscionousess and see Sakura go down. Then he will pull in whatever power he can, transform into Kyuubi-form to one degree or another, and then do to the invading Sand forces what they intended for Gaara to do to Konoha. Only more so because Naruto in this fic is far more disciplined and focused than Gaara's bloodthirst was in cannon.

Could be very epic. :waytogo
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Nebula1701 » July 6th, 2009, 5:24 pm

The Will Born In Fire was updated and it was a very enjoyable chapter :D
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Phht » July 6th, 2009, 7:14 pm

Ya know, I had thought the vow to let the Raikage kill him if Naruto used Kyuubi's chakra was incredibly stupid, but instead of it being a cause for conflict over him needing to use it, it became a character building moment for him in the eyes of others by not using it. I felt it was actually handled quite well.

But, oh god, Sakura's fight with the pretty boy. :animlol: :animlol: :animlol:
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Nebula1701 » September 18th, 2009, 2:08 pm

wooot "Naruto: Captured" has been updated!!
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Phht » September 18th, 2009, 8:58 pm

Sakura did some nasty damage before going down. Yay. I wonder how Orochimaru will take it when he discovers that there was a KB with him the entire time instead of the actual Hokage?
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Nebula1701 » October 5th, 2009, 5:37 pm

wow "The Lost Ninja" was just updated

*runs off to read*
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Unread postby Phht » October 5th, 2009, 5:57 pm

Well played, Kyuubi. Well played. :waytogo
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Unread postby Nebula1701 » October 5th, 2009, 6:28 pm

indeed good chapter :D
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby SirKaid » October 6th, 2009, 8:29 am

I can't help but wonder if the Uchiha's death might actually be a boon for Sound. Assuming there's a relatively bloodless transition of power, Sound will no longer be saddled with a debilitatingly megalomaniacal despot. I can't help but think that Kabuto would be able to put up a much better war front than Uchiha did. Then again, there's also the question of whether or not Sound is even able to wage war after the losses in their last attack.

With Uchiha dead, would Sound be able to attempt to sue for peace? It's questionable how guilty the village in general is, as opposed to just the leadership.
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Nebula1701 » October 16th, 2009, 10:45 pm

well there is only one chapter left now....
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Nebula1701 » October 19th, 2009, 4:29 pm

last chapter of "Naruto: The Lost Ninja" is out and it was a great little open-ended ending.
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Unread postby jgkitarel » October 28th, 2009, 11:29 pm

Yes, a very nice ending indeed.
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Nebula1701 » November 17th, 2009, 8:56 pm

"Naruto: Captured The Chunin Exams" has been posted today... it is a side story to "Naruto: Captured," showing off what was going on in the exams themselves.
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby gman391 » November 19th, 2009, 12:55 pm

Now I'm annoyed. I didn't have Ed on author alert :doh
Still a nice chapter all told the Hinata parts were well done I thought. Not sure about the gate thing though...
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby serbii » November 19th, 2009, 9:10 pm

Eh, I didn't like the Hinata parts.
Evidently we're getting some explanation next chapter but it seemed all too convenient and sueish to me.
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Nebula1701 » January 16th, 2010, 11:00 pm

well anyway the next installment of the side story has just been posted.
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Phht » February 25th, 2010, 5:19 pm

Psst! Hey! New chapter of Naruto: Captured!

Invasion Conclusion. Also, the time off from writing the story has led to a shift on how the rest will be handled, it seems.
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Nebula1701 » February 25th, 2010, 11:19 pm

read it and it was fine but just something felt off to me...
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Unread postby Nebula1701 » March 11th, 2010, 3:08 pm

I'm surprised no one mentioned that Naruto: Captured and its side story have been update.
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby Phht » March 11th, 2010, 9:22 pm

I was just coming over to the forums to note the update. :yuush:

Interesting turn of events in the chapter.
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Re: EdStargazer's Fanfic works - Fic Discussion

Unread postby EdStargazer » May 4th, 2010, 4:35 pm

Naruto: Captured was updated
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